Not much to say…just posted chapter two. Looking to see if you all feel like you are starting to get some more depth to the characters Riker and La Croix.
Do you feel that the circumstances are believable?
What do you think of the flight briefing doling out the assignments to the pilots? I especially enjoyed writing that part.
Let me know if you were confused at any point while reading.
Is Riker too much like Han Solo? I’m trying to avoid that! Never felt Lucas allowed Han to develop enough in the movies. Some of the book series, the ones “no longer canon”, do paint a more angsty and dark side of Han Solo. I’m trying to go more for a character who lives a life of crime, but has a hidden, often neglected desire to do good. Probably will need to explore more his relationship with Sean and figure out where his kids came from etc.
Am I painting enough tension with the impending shuttle transfer of Riker to the orbital station above Jupiter?
Lastly. Is it clear that family, clan, cartel, syndicate are all different ways of referring to the crime organizations that compete to control the drug trade?
Hope you enjoy.
Mythos Creative Writing 
Enjoyed Chapter Two and the development of the story and characters. I did get confused as you started to introduce new characters. I’m wondering whether Knossus is a team, vehicle or individual. Also, you italicized Diligence to identify it as a vehicle but you did not do that with Bertha, which I think is a vehicle, not a person or a team.
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